This is absolutely wonderful. This is the first time someone has written a fic for me and it is beautiful.
He'd leaned back in his leather chair on that note, looking so sure of himself, convinced he knew all the right buttons to push. Sometimes in the endless nights, when Shawn was so awake it felt like electrical current surging under his skin, he would try to imagine how Jordan Collier had looked a second later, after he'd gotten up and turned around and walked out of his office. He tried to guess if the man's expression had clouded over or cleared with realization as he figured it out. That Shawn didn't want to be special. He didn't wanted to be anybody at all.
I love how Shawn's reluctance knocks the wind out of the sails of an over-confident Jordan. The first sign that Jordan is not going to be completely in control of this relationship. Shawn knows he needs to be understood, not just led.
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love the VM reference...
Shawn frowned, because it sounded like Jordan was saying one thing, but it felt like something else entirely, something that gave him the same too-hot, too-alive sensation he got whenever he healed someone. And the more he stared into Jordan's face, trying to figure it out, the less certain he was of anything.
Ahh, more ambivalence and love the power shifts! I also like Shawn equating the feeling his gifts give him to this feeling that Jordan is tapping into.
The ancient fan whirred noisily above them, an irony really, since there was no air at all. Steam clung to the walls, the hot smell of grease permeated everything.
and
The air rushed against the windshield like it was coming to meet them, and there was a sense of inevitability to that, to everything.
I love your imagery.
And finally...
Maybe Shawn just needed someone to tell him what to do... and "You can't run away from who you are, you know," Jordan told him, in an infuriatingly sensible tone. "But you don't have to be alone, either." and Shawn let out his breath and thought: Okay.
Just perfect.
Thanks so much for this. I really like your portrayal of each character and this AU look at the beginning of their relationship.
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Date: 2005-10-11 04:19 am (UTC)He'd leaned back in his leather chair on that note, looking so sure of himself, convinced he knew all the right buttons to push. Sometimes in the endless nights, when Shawn was so awake it felt like electrical current surging under his skin, he would try to imagine how Jordan Collier had looked a second later, after he'd gotten up and turned around and walked out of his office. He tried to guess if the man's expression had clouded over or cleared with realization as he figured it out. That Shawn didn't want to be special. He didn't wanted to be anybody at all.
I love how Shawn's reluctance knocks the wind out of the sails of an over-confident Jordan. The first sign that Jordan is not going to be completely in control of this relationship. Shawn knows he needs to be understood, not just led.
Two Neptune burgers
love the VM reference...
Shawn frowned, because it sounded like Jordan was saying one thing, but it felt like something else entirely, something that gave him the same too-hot, too-alive sensation he got whenever he healed someone. And the more he stared into Jordan's face, trying to figure it out, the less certain he was of anything.
Ahh, more ambivalence and love the power shifts! I also like Shawn equating the feeling his gifts give him to this feeling that Jordan is tapping into.
The ancient fan whirred noisily above them, an irony really, since there was no air at all. Steam clung to the walls, the hot smell of grease permeated everything.
and
The air rushed against the windshield like it was coming to meet them, and there was a sense of inevitability to that, to everything.
I love your imagery.
And finally...
Maybe Shawn just needed someone to tell him what to do...
and
"You can't run away from who you are, you know," Jordan told him, in an infuriatingly sensible tone. "But you don't have to be alone, either."
and
Shawn let out his breath and thought: Okay.
Just perfect.
Thanks so much for this. I really like your portrayal of each character and this AU look at the beginning of their relationship.