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Five Times Dean Lost At Pool

1. Dude. Her boobs. And her shirt, cut down to there. Just-- dude.

2. Fucker cheated!

3. Boobs.

4. Cheated!

5. So I'm trying to make us some money, right? So we don't have to sleep in the damned car again that night. And all Sammy has to do is lay low, maybe watch my back, in case one of these deadbeats isn't exactly philosophical about losing his paycheck. I'm doing my thing, making jokes, timing my move, and I look up, and what the hell? Sammy's sitting at the bar, nursing his one beer of the night--really knows how to live it up, that little bro of mine--deep in conversation with some squirrelly looking psycho.

Sam's gone all bright-eyed about whatever they're talking about, crinkle between his eyes that he gets when he's really interested in something, same look from his stamp collecting days and hunting for rocks and all kinds of boring ass shit he used to do when he was a kid. But the way the psycho's staring at Sam, it's like he wants to take him apart at the seams, like he's trying to figure out how he can get parts of him all over parts of Sam. Not the first time that's ever happened, but this creepy bastard's got something hard and ugly lurking beneath the lust, I can sense it.

"Your turn," the guy I'm playing against grunts at me, beefy trucker in a John Deere cap.

I line up my shot. Time to go in for the kill, but I make the mistake of looking back over my shoulder. The psycho's got his hand on Sam's arm, leaning in close, and Sam's all baby-faced and trusting, like nothing's ever threatened him before, like he couldn't tell danger from his own asshole. My pool cue stutters, hits off the mark, the ball spinning lazily into nothing.

The trucker laughs ao hard his gut shakes. "Son, let me show you how it's done."

Three shots later, he's walking off with the last of our cash, smiling like a smug son of a bitch.

I throw down my cue, pissed as all hell, and go pull Sam off the barstool. "We're out of here."

"What the fuck?" Now he's pissed, too.

"Wait for me in the car."

Of course, he hesitates. Sammy can't ever just fucking do what I tell him, but there must be something at least a little convincing in my tone, because he stomps off, muttering, "asshole."

The squirrelly psycho holds up his hands, all big-eyed with faked innocence. "Hey, man, I didn't know."

I grab him by collar--button-down shirts are handy when you need to cut off a scumbag's air supply--and I tell him, "Well, I know. And I ought to kill you for just thinking shit like that about my brother."

I twist my wrist, and the collar tightens, and the bullshit denial the guy was about to spew comes out a raspy air-sucking noise instead. A hell of a lot more satisfying. For me, anyway.

When he's turned the right shade of blue, I push him away. "Keepin' my eye on you. Any freak-ass thing you do? I'm taking it personally."

Sam's outside, not in the car of course, because that would be too much to ask for. He pushes off from the wall when he sees me.

"Happy now?" He rolls his eyes.

"Well, the guy's still breathing, so not really."

"Jesus, Dean. We were talking about history."

"The fucker was a goddamned psycho, Sam! There's probably a whole bunch of other people he "talked history" with buried under the floorboards of his house."

Sam shakes his head. "I think you need a vacation. Or maybe some professional help."

I make a face at him. "Just get in the car."

When we pass the last motel on their way out of town, Sam scowls. "So, not only did you go all batshit on me, you lost too?"

"Shut up, Sammy. You're not tied up in some sadist's secret funhouse. So stop your complaining."

"You're certifiable, you know that?"

There's a farm on the outskirts, good place to stow away for the night, and I park underneath some trees, off the road, so the cops won't bother us, away from the house, so we won't wake up to a dude in overalls pointing a shot gun at our heads.

"You're taking the front seat, since this is your fault," Sam announces, slamming the doors both times as he moves to the back.

"You're an ungrateful bastard, anybody ever tell you that?" I rustle around, trying to find a position where my knees don't knock against the steering wheel.

I wait until it's quiet and I think Sam's drifted off, then I slowly inch up to peer over the seat, because my instincts won't shut up and I'm not going to get any rest until I make sure, as stupid as that sounds. Sam's eyes are bright in the darkness, and I sigh, braced for mockery.

Sam's voice is surprisingly soft with understanding, "I'm not tied up in some psycho's secret funhouse, Dean."

There's no air in my lungs for just a moment, and then I tell him with a smirk, "Not yet, anyway."

The corner of Sam's mouth turns up. "Asshole."

I laugh, and when I settle back down, I figure out a way around the steering wheel , close my eyes, and sleep comes easily.

Date: 2006-09-09 04:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bitchygrrl.livejournal.com
Well done this put a smile on my face.

Date: 2006-09-12 04:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Yay! I'm glad it made you smile. :)

yay!

Date: 2006-09-09 04:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lizzie451.livejournal.com
Dean, and Sam and Dean, and Yay!

Its so sweet with the soft eyes and crunchy with the Winchester smirk... :)

Re: yay!

Date: 2006-09-12 04:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Hee. That really sums up their relationship. :)

Re: yay!

Date: 2006-09-12 04:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm glad you enjoyed, doll!

Date: 2006-09-09 05:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alistra.livejournal.com
*lol* so cool! Thanks for sharing!

Date: 2006-09-12 04:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Yay! Glad you enjoyed it.

Date: 2006-09-09 06:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Yay! Perfect! Poor Dean. It's like having to keep track of a toddler. ;)

Sam's voice is surprisingly soft with understanding, "I'm not tied up in some psycho's secret funhouse, Dean."
There's no air in my lungs for just a moment, and then I tell him with a smirk, "Not yet, anyway."


N'awww. Winchester ♥!

Thanks for this!

Date: 2006-09-12 04:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Ah, Sam. Still too trusting after all that's happened. At least he has Dean to keep him (mostly) out of trouble. *g*

Date: 2006-09-09 07:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wearemany.livejournal.com
oh, i really really liked this. i think i maybe liked the first four just as much, even, as the longer one, because they're so succinctly dean. and the first person works amazingly well here.

Date: 2006-09-12 04:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Glad you enjoyed! And hee. The first four really do say something about Dean, it's true.

Date: 2006-09-09 09:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] winterlive.livejournal.com
heeheeheeheehee.

classic.

Date: 2006-09-12 04:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Glad it made you laugh, doll! :)

Date: 2006-09-10 12:29 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] celli
Ha, awesome.

Date: 2006-09-12 04:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Glad you enjoyed, doll!

Date: 2006-09-10 01:57 am (UTC)

Date: 2006-09-12 04:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Keeping Sam out of trouble is a full-time job! *g*

Date: 2006-09-10 02:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nebt-het.livejournal.com
This was so sweet....awww!

Date: 2006-09-12 04:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2006-09-11 06:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] esorlehcar.livejournal.com
I wait until it's quiet and I think Sam's drifted off, then I slowly inch up to peer over the seat, because my instincts won't shut up and I'm not going to get any rest until I make sure, as stupid as that sounds. Sam's eyes are bright in the darkness, and I sigh, braced for mockery.

Sam's voice is surprisingly soft with understanding, "I'm not tied up in some psycho's secret funhouse, Dean."


This was so funny and just so much throughout, and then I got to this and absolutely melted. Gorgeous.

Date: 2006-09-12 04:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Thanks, doll! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :)

Date: 2006-09-20 03:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] them0rgue.livejournal.com
Man, I always forget how much I love SPN until I read some fic. Funny and sweet at the same time; you're always fantastic.

Minor grammar issue, I'm not sure if it's on purpose and I'm missing the point, but there's a short section where you switch POVs from first to third:

Dean makes a face at him. "Just get in the car."

When they pass the last motel on their way out of town, Sam scowls at him. "So, not only did you go all batshit on me, you lost too?"

Date: 2006-09-24 01:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Glad you liked this little piece. I had such a great time doing this meme.

Re: the POV switch. Oops! *is sheepish* It really doesn't come naturally to me to write in the first person, and I kept forgetting and falling out of it while I was writing. I thought I caught all the slip-ups, but...not. Thanks for pointing that out. I fixed it.

Date: 2006-10-29 07:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanofmydreams.livejournal.com
I don't think i have ever laughed so hard in my life!

Date: 2006-11-23 02:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Hee! Glad you enjoyed!

Date: 2006-12-30 03:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] barely-bean.livejournal.com
Protective!Dean is just so...so...*sighs* Oh Dean.

Date: 2007-02-03 07:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Doll, I totally missed responding to this. But, hey, very belatedly, I do really enjoy protective!Dean. Like protective!John and protective!Nathan. Oh, boys!

Date: 2007-01-30 03:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] llaras.livejournal.com
This is awesome in the way that it made me grin and grin and grin. Me likey.

Date: 2007-02-03 07:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Yay! I'm glad this made you grin. Exasperated!Dean was a lot of fun to write. *g*

Date: 2007-03-14 10:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] twasadark.livejournal.com
Great story! Loved the Dean POV here! And the way you started it out was classic! Looking forward to reading more of your work!

Date: 2007-03-19 05:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Hee. I'm glad you liked the beginning of the story. That really kind of sums up Dean for me. *g*

Date: 2007-05-14 09:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elektrik-storm.livejournal.com
this is really sweet! dean reminds me of a little boy checking that his teddy is still there before he goes to sleep!

/shutting up.

i loved it!

Date: 2007-06-10 10:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Awww. I love that image of little Dean with a teddy bear.

I'm glad you liked this!

Date: 2007-06-10 08:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] quirkies.livejournal.com
this is just lovely and heartwarming. dean is such a mom!
:)

Date: 2007-06-10 10:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Hee! Dean is rather maternal sometimes, isn't it?

I'm glad you liked this!

Date: 2007-11-16 01:09 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] melusina
Oh, *lovely*! I really like the dynamic between them in this.

Date: 2007-12-02 05:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Dean is just a really good brother, you know?

Date: 2008-02-01 12:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thelimpshrimp.livejournal.com
I haven't read many first person Dean fics - this was great!

Nice opening sequence, lol.

Date: 2008-02-12 07:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Glad you enjoyed this. And hee! Numbers 1-4 seemed very Dean to me.

Date: 2008-05-15 12:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tanpopo03.livejournal.com
A little late, but oh well:

So sweet! *melts*
And Dean's voice was perfect!

Date: 2008-06-08 03:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you liked this! I don't often write in the first person. It's great to hear you thought the voice worked. Thanks!

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