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Series: Bric-a-Brac Kid 'verse
Fandom: SGA
Previous Stories: Bric-a-Brac Childbearing, The Alien Priestess Is Always The First To Know, Pregnancy-Related Weirdness, This Is Not A Death Wish, Dr. Spock Mentioned Nothing About This, and Customary.
Note: After this, just one more story to go in the planned arc. Woot!
Disclaimer: I read three different sites for information about birthin' babies and got three different stories, so apologies in advance for whatever is not quite right.

Summary: There are two sides to every story, so here are two stories of Baby McKay's entry into the world.

Title: April 12, 2007, 10:12 a.m.
Pairing: John/Rodney
Rating: G



April 12, 2007, 10:12 a.m.
by Lenore

The consultation before the C-section is mostly a matter of calming nerves and answering questions. Rodney's last checkup looked good, and the surgery is scheduled for the day after tomorrow. It's rare that Carson has the luxury of discussing a procedure in advance with a patient, and Rodney can always use a little extra settling down. Carson figures if he spends half an hour with Rodney calling him a witch doctor and reminding him that this is a future Nobel Prize winner he's delivering, they'll be good to go.

Rodney arrives for his appointment with Colonel Sheppard in tow, not surprisingly, and Carson waves them to the chairs in front of his desk. "Make yourselves comfortable."

He takes them step-by-step through what to expect, and Rodney doesn't interrupt once, which is rather startling. There's not so much as a snide remark about Carson's proficiency as a surgeon when he gives them the standard disclaimer, that although this is a perfectly safe procedure any surgery has its risks. Rodney just sits there listening, his eyes big and panicky, hands gripping the arms of the chair, his knuckles white with strain. Honestly, Carson has seen people with intestinal viruses who have better color, and it's oddly unsettling to have Rodney too terrified to complain.

He tries to offer reassurance, "You've no cause for concern. Truly, Rodney."

But Rodney isn't listening. He's looking grim-faced at John. "I want you to raise the baby if something happens to me. I don't care what some blood test says."

"Nothing is going to happen to you," John insists.

"He's right, Rodney," Carson assures him.

Rodney glares impatiently. "You were too afraid to stick a needle in there! Because you said you have no idea if my not-quite-a-uterus is the same as an actual uterus. What makes you think cutting me open and pulling the kid out of there is going to be so much simpler?" He turns an even sicklier shade of gray, as if he's visualizing the process.

John takes a turn trying to comfort him, "It's going to be okay. You're going to be okay."

Again, Rodney isn't listening. "I should probably sign something making you the guardian. A will. I don't have a will." He frowns. "I can't believe I came to another galaxy without even making a will."

"Rodney," John says, struggling to remain patient, and Carson imagines that many of their conversations must go like this.

"Just promise me, okay?" Rodney looks a little pleading.

John starts to go pale, as well. "Okay. But nothing's going to happen to you." It sounds suspiciously like an order.


After they leave, Carson spends some time reviewing the surgery. He hasn't delivered a baby since his obstetrics rotation in medical school. His resident was a big bear of a man, Jimmy Finley, as tall as a doorframe and nearly as wide, with bushy blonde hair and a grizzled beard, an unlikely character to find in the halls of the maternity ward, amidst the pastel murals of teddy bears and butterflies. The extent of the wisdom Dr. Finley had to impart about bringing babies into the world was, "Not much to it, really. The mother does all the work. You just have to make sure you don't drop the kid when it finally pops out."

Like some kind of curse, because the first birth Carson attended, everything was going along according to the proverbial textbook, a short labor, the woman's third child. The baby crowned, and the shoulders cleared, and Carson got ready to catch him, and there he went, right through Carson's hands. The nurse scrambled to pick the child up, and thank God, no harm done. But Carson can still hear that terrible plop if he thinks about it, new life meeting the hard, cold tile floor. If he drops Rodney's baby, it's not just Rodney who'll be out for blood. He'll have half of Atlantis to contend with.

I will not drop Rodney's baby becomes his own personal mantra for the next thirty-six hours.


Rodney elects to be awake for the surgery, so Carson administers an epidural--after Rodney finishes explaining why it will imperil two galaxies if Carson botches the job and ends up paralyzing him. It's something of a relief to have Rodney bitching again, which is not an opinion Carson ever expected to hold.

Colonel Sheppard dons a set of scrubs and stands at Rodney's shoulder to offer encouragement. The surgical team sets up a screen to shield them from the sight of cutting, but still, they both look rather green around the gills, as if they might pass out at the slightest provocation.

"Just keep breathing," Carson tells them.

Some things really are like riding a bike, Carson is happy to discover once they get underway. He makes a lateral incision in Rodney's lower abdomen, opening Rodney's not-quite-a-uterus, and there's the baby's head, right where it's supposed to be. He pulls her out, and newborns aren't any less slippery now than they were twenty years ago. Happily, Nurse Prescott is quickly at hand with a towel and a sure grip. He cuts the umbilical cord and checks the clock on the wall. 10:12 a.m., that's what the birth certificate will read. The nurse puts the baby on the warmer, and Carson suctions the fluid out of her lungs, while Dr. Biro takes over working on Rodney.

When Carson has checked the baby over, he carries her around to Rodney. "Why don't you hold your daughter while we finish closing the incision?"

Carson nestles her into his arms, and Rodney stares and stares. "Oh my God. You're an actual person. "

John can't take his eyes off the baby either, his fingers curled tightly around Rodney's shoulder, as if he wants to reach out, touch a tiny foot, a tiny hand, just to convince himself that she's real, but he doesn't quite dare.

Suturing takes a good half hour, and by the time they're finished, Rodney has grown possessive of his daughter.

"Just let us get her cleaned up while we move you to recovery," Carson reasons with him. "I'll test the blood from the umbilical cord to see--" He glances awkwardly at John and clears his throat. "To see."

The mantra starts up again. Only this time it's: Please let Colonel Sheppard be the other father. He doesn't know how he'll tell them if that's not the case, and the mantra grows a little more frantic as he runs the test. Thanks to the wonders of Ancient-enhanced technology, he has the results shortly enough. He takes a big breath, and Nurse Prescott brings him the baby, washed and freshly diapered, her fist curled against her mouth. He carries her into the recovery room, where Rodney is waiting not so patiently, but Carson ignores him and hands the baby to John. "Congratulations, Colonel. You and Rodney have a lovely and perfectly healthy wee lass."

John just stares, as if the words are taking their time filtering in, and then he looks down at the tiny, squirming thing in his arms, and his expression goes utterly bleak with terror. Carson can just imagine the new parent spiral of panic, She's completely helpless, and why haven't I childproofed my quarters, and someday I'll have to teach her how to drive, and if she's anything like Rodney, I'll be paying for higher education until I'm dead.

Carson claps him cheerfully on the back. "Welcome to the rest of your life, lad."

Rodney looks on, his expression almost jarringly tender, for about a second, and then he's back to being Rodney. "Gimme," he demands, hands outstretched for his daughter.

The Colonel hands her over good-naturedly, settling on the edge of the bed.

Rodney tells the baby, "I hope you appreciate all the trouble I went to for you." The many kisses he presses to the top of her head belie any attempt at sternness, however.

The well-wishers waiting outside have long since grown restless, so Carson gives the go ahead to let them in. They crowd around the bed. Elizabeth makes "awwww" sounds, and Radek waves to the baby, and Teyla studies her carefully.

"I believe congratulations are in order," she says to Colonel Sheppard.

"How did you know?" Rodney asks curiously.

Teyla smiles. "There is a very strong resemblance."

Rodney gives his baby a long look of scrutiny. "Oh, great. I'm going to spend the rest of my life fighting off no-good losers trying to get their grubby hands on my daughter." He glares at John. "All because you have to have the pretty gene."

"So, what are you going to call her?" Ronon sensibly interrupts.

John and Rodney exchange the kind of measuring looks that Carson has only ever seen at the negotiation table. Or when he's playing poker.

"Just not Theano," John puts his foot down. "I don't think the kids on the playground are going to care that she's named for the wife of Pythagoras."

"Who made her own contributions to math," Rodney insists indignantly. "Principle of the Golden Mean? Ever heard of it?"

"Playground, Rodney."

Rodney sighs and mutters something about not letting other people's ignorant brats make their decisions for them, but finally he concedes, "Fine, if she's not going to be the namesake of the matriarch of mathematics, then let's call her Molly."

John appears utterly blindsided by this, although in a good way. "Are you sure?"

"She does look like you," Rodney says. "So she may as well be named after your mother. Molly Sheppard McKay." He smiles down at the baby. "It's got a ring to it, don't you think?"

John's eyes get suspiciously bright, his voice tight. "Thanks, Rodney."

Rodney sniffs. "Only because you refused to comprehend the glory of Theano." But there's a hint of pink in his cheeks that suggests he's actually quite pleased that John's happy.

Newly named, Molly starts to shriek her head off, and Rodney scowls at Carson. "What did you and your staff of voodoo practitioners do to her while I wasn't looking?"

Carson rolls his eyes. "She's hungry, Rodney. That happens with babies."

"Oh." Rodney glances down at Molly, who is by now red-faced and sobbing. "I get a little cranky too when I haven't eaten."

John raises an eyebrow. "A little?"

Rodney makes a face at him.

Nurse Prescott brings a bottle of formula and shows Rodney how to hold it, and Molly tucks eagerly into her dinner.

"She eats like McKay," Ronon observes.

Rodney narrows his eyes at Ronon, but can't quite conceal his pride that his daughter takes after him in the healthy appetite department.

"Sorry about the formula and the food allergies you're probably going to develop as a result of it," Rodney tells Molly conversationally. "But Ancient technology can only subvert nature so far, and let's face facts, with half your genetic makeup coming from me, there wasn't much chance you weren't going to end up living in terror of entire food groups."

John presses a kiss to Rodney's temple, with a bemused smile. "Way to think positive there, McKay."

"Oh, you know it's true!"

John toys with Molly's foot, and she kicks at his hand, as if she doesn't appreciate being bothered while she's eating. "I don't know. She seems pretty hearty to me. Kind of strong-willed, too." He grins fondly. "I can't imagine where she gets that from."

Molly finishes her meal, and lets out a fairly resounding belch for someone so small. The nurse takes the bottle away, and Rodney starts to shift uncomfortably. He glares accusingly at Carson. "What did you sew up inside me?"

"That's the pain medication wearing off. You'll be needing another dose."

Rodney is reluctant to let go of the baby, even long enough to let Carson make him feel better, but at last, he grudgingly turns Molly over to her other father. Carson takes care of Rodney, and everyone else crowds around John, cooing at Molly.

"Feel free to praise her intelligence and beauty as extravagantly as you like," Rodney instructs them, the pain meds already giving him a loopy smile. Or maybe that's simply happiness. Carson's not sure he's ever seen that on Rodney before.

When Rodney starts to yawn, however, that's definitely the medication at work, and Carson begins to herd everyone out. "Rodney needs his rest. You can come back later this afternoon."

Just Sheppard-McKays left at last, and John plants his feet, pulls the baby into his chest, with a look that dares Carson to try to make him go.

Carson holds up a hand. "I assume you'll want to stay with Rodney and the baby. I'll have a cot brought in for you tonight. Molly will need to eat every two hours or so, and Rodney, until your stitches come out, you leave picking up the baby to Colonel Sheppard."

Rodney mutters "okay," already half asleep.

"In a few days, as long as the incision is healing nicely, you can all go home together."

Now that she's full, Molly is dozing, drooling on John's t-shirt. He rocks her gently and kisses her forehead, and Carson says, "You might want to put her down for a nap while she's still in a mood to go."

John is no more eager to part with his daughter than Rodney was, but he gives in to common sense. He settles Molly onto her back in the crib and pulls the blanket Katie Brown made up over her. Molly shifts, makes a fitful noise, and then falls promptly back to sleep.

"Let us know if you need anything," Carson tells John.

"Thanks, doc. For everything."

John heads over to Rodney's bedside. Carson starts out the door, and doesn't know what makes him glance back, but when he does, he sees John carefully drape his arm across Rodney's chest and press a kiss to his head. "I wanted her to be mine so much."

Rodney has his eyes closed, and he smiles sleepily, brings his hand up to touch John's arm. "I know, and I love you too, but don't think you're going to sweet talk me into having any more of your children."

John grins, and Carson walks on, leaves them alone to begin their life as a family. He settles down at his desk with a stack of charts to review, and he thinks that if anyone else takes a notion to get pregnant, whether it's an accident with alien technology or simply the old-fashioned way, at least he's got the whole not dropping the baby thing under control now.




Title: The Loudness of Gestures
Characters: Miko, Kavanagh
Rating: G



The Loudness of Gestures
by Lenore

It's only four o'clock in the afternoon, but the lab is quiet and still. Most everyone has gone off to celebrate Molly Sheppard McKay, the first child born in Atlantis in 10,000 years. Word of the name spread quickly, and by lunchtime, Sergeant Ames was counting his winnings, the lucky guesser in the "Name The Baby" pool.

Only Miko and Dr. Kavanagh remain, seated side by side at the workbench, staring into their respective computers as if they're each alone.

When Miko was twelve, her father paid her the first and only compliment, "You are as quiet as a butterfly's wings."

Or at least, it was a compliment to her father's way of thinking.

Miko knows that her silence is often misinterpreted. To her father, it meant modesty, and many people believe she is shy, and there was an American doctoral student she dated in grad school who once told her, "You're too in love with thinking to care about talking, aren't you?"

None of this is particularly the case. Miko just experienced a disappointment with words early in life, the way they never quite match up to what you see or feel or imagine, how hard it is to say even a fraction of what you mean, and she's not put much faith in talking since.

Being quiet makes people often forget she's even there, and sometimes Miko ends up knowing things she probably shouldn't. She knows, for instance, that Dr. Kavanagh's relationship to words is just as awkward as her own.

The first argument he had with Rodney over the baby concerned graduate programs in physics, of all ridiculous things.

"Of course, she'll go to MIT," Dr. Kavanagh proclaimed. "She'll have the best opportunities there."

Rodney puffed up indignantly. "She'll go to the University of Chicago, thank you very much. I practically put that school on the map. They owe me nothing short of slavish devotion to my daughter's education."

Then there was the debate--that's what they called it at least--about which pioneering female mathematician was more worthy of having a namesake.

"Theano was the first, at least the first who made it into recorded history, that makes her the best," Rodney argued.

To which Dr. Kavanagh snorted loudly. "She was someone's wife. Emilie du Châtelet was one of the greatest mathematicians of the eighteenth century, all in her own right."

But the ugliest fight--there was no other word for it--was whether the baby should stay in Atlantis once she was born or be taken back to Earth.

"Are you insane?" Kavanagh demanded, his face turning almost frighteningly red. "Have you forgotten the part where there are space vampires trying to kill us all? Or that we've made an enemy of practically every advanced race in this galaxy? Or that the station itself is still largely a mystery and we could just accidentally blow ourselves up one day?"

"This is where she belongs," was all Rodney had to say about it, and he curtly turned on his heel and walked away.

Only a quiet person truly hears the loudness of gestures, Miko feels certain, and Rodney is not a quiet person. So he has taken for granted the power bars that just mysteriously appeared at his work station, never once noticed Dr. Kavanagh's too perfect absence of expression when he glanced around to see who might have left them for him. Rodney thought nothing of Dr. Kavanagh's insistence that the Ancient equipment needed more regular diagnostics, never peered over his shoulder to see him checking and rechecking that the radiation levels were safe. Rodney missed entirely the backward glance when Dr. Kavanagh went off to help Dr. Zelenka during the Wraith attack, the forlorn resignation of a man who might never see his child born.

Miko has been practically deafened by all of this.

It's not actually possible for the sound of laughter and backslapping and "congratulations, Colonel Sheppard" to travel this far from the mess hall, but it echoes in the room with them nonetheless. Dr. Kavanagh stares stubbornly straight ahead at his computer, and pretends to notice nothing, feel nothing, but Miko knows.

Her first year in her doctoral program, maybe it was loneliness or an unfortunate case of hero worship that made her think it was a good idea to sleep with her advisor, a married man with three children. It happened just a few times before she came to her senses, and they were always so careful. But still, the next month the usual day for her period came and went. And went. And went. And went.

Then on the fifth day, she woke up with cramps and a backache and stained underwear. Just a false alarm, and she should have been relieved, and mostly she was. But there was a little part of her, the place where distant possibilities took on a life of their own and flourished so vividly, that mourned losing what she'd never actually had.

Miko looks straight ahead at her own computer, and she knows it all worked out for the best back then, just as it has now. Rodney and Colonel Sheppard and Molly will be a family, in the true sense of the word. And yet, Dr. Kavanagh stares at his work as if it's the only thing he has in the whole of the universe, and Miko is not deaf.

She reaches out and settles her hand gently on top of his. That he doesn't pull away speaks volumes.


Note: Thank you to everyone who voted in the "Name Rodney's Baby" poll, and special thanks to [livejournal.com profile] girlnamedpixley for suggesting Molly and [livejournal.com profile] pun for helping me decide on it.

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Date: 2007-04-12 05:58 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] in-interval.livejournal.com
I just love both of these, but the second one in particular. I have a soft spot for Kavanagh and so often he is demonized in stories because he makes a convenient villain. My heart goes out to both Miko and Kavanagh here and I hope they find happiness. (I'm pretty sure Rodney and John already have.) Thanks!

Date: 2007-04-12 08:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm glad you liked these! I really started out with Kavanagh as a villain of sorts, but then, I started thinking about how he'd feel that everyone in Atlantis was rooting for it to be John's baby. I thought it only fair to write his side of the story, too.

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From: [identity profile] korilian.livejournal.com - Date: 2007-05-17 09:47 am (UTC) - Expand

Date: 2007-04-12 06:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tex.livejournal.com
OMG, I wanted the first story to go on forever. It was just note-perfect. And the second was beautiful - the insight into Miko and the contrast of Kavanaugh. I have enjoyed this universe so much. Thank you for sharing it! *hearts*

Date: 2007-04-12 08:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed these stories. I wanted to tell it from both sides, the people becoming a family and the people left out. Thank you for all the lovely feedback along the way!

Date: 2007-04-12 06:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] purelyironic.livejournal.com
Both stories were wonderful.

The first story made me sniffle and smile for different reasons. Firstly because of the lovely John/Rodney interaction and secondly because of this:

But Carson can still hear that terrible plop if he thinks about it, new life meeting the hard, cold tile floor.

This is TMI, but that actually happend during my daughter's birth. Frotunately nothing happend to her, but it makes me love Carson's I-will-not-drop-Rodney's-baby-mantra even more.

Date: 2007-04-12 08:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Oh, your poor daughter! I'm glad there was no harm done, but I can't imagine how upsetting that must have been. I got that part of the story, actually, from a friend of mine who's a doctor, a story she told me when she was in med school, that what everyone worried about during their obstetrics rotation was dropping the baby.

I'm so glad you liked the story!

Date: 2007-04-12 06:09 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] ladycat777.livejournal.com
Oh, wow. I read the first story grinning like a loon because it was just so perfectly them -- and naming a child for a deceased mother makes my heart swell.

But the second story -- that's the gem. It's so easy to make Kavanagh a cardboard villain, someone to loathe without any layers or complexities. And here you show us those complexities, opening up both him and Miko, making them sing in the quiet moments. Everyone wanted Sheppard to win, which makes you forget that Kavanagh loses.

These are wonderful.

Date: 2007-04-12 08:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you liked these, doll! I really started out making Kavanagh a cardboard villain of sorts, someone for people to root against, but a few stories in, I started thinking about it from his point of view. How would it feel for him to know that no one hoped it was his baby? So I had to write the second story about the baby's birth as a counter balance to the first.

Date: 2007-04-12 06:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] niangao.livejournal.com
My love for this universe and everyone in it is ginormous. Carson! Miko! And now, even Kavanagh.

Just

You can bet I joined Carson in on his personal mantras. Making Carson the doctor with a history of dropping newborns is very evil of you. But all is forgiven because thank you thank you for making John the daddy :D

Rodney tells the baby, "I hope you appreciate all the trouble I went to for you."

Hehe. Don't we know it.

Molly Sheppard McKay does have a nice ring to it.

Date: 2007-04-12 08:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm glad you liked this! Hee. Poor Carson. That was actually the terrible fear a friend of mine had during her obstetrics rotation. Happily for her, though, she didn't actually drop any children. :)

Date: 2007-04-12 06:20 pm (UTC)

Date: 2007-04-12 08:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you thought so, doll! *hugs*

Date: 2007-04-12 06:25 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] amalthia
Glad the baby arrived safe and sound. :)

Date: 2007-04-12 08:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
All the fingers and toes accounted for! :)

Date: 2007-04-12 06:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lovelokest.livejournal.com
*happy sigh*

Date: 2007-04-12 08:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
*beams* Glad you enjoyed, doll!

Date: 2007-04-12 06:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wojelah.livejournal.com
The first was adorable, and lovely, and perfect.

The second broke my heart. You made Kavanagh break my heart.

*stands in awe*

Date: 2007-04-12 08:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
When I started out, I was perfectly happy making Kavanagh the villain of sorts, but then...I started thinking about it from his point of view. And I decided I had to be fair.

I'm so glad you liked the stories!

Date: 2007-04-12 06:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] 20thcenturyvole.livejournal.com
Oh my God, I'm aaaww-ing and *flail*-ing fit to wake the dead, for both of these stories. Carson's experience of child-delivery made a great POV for the first story; I don't know what to think about the second story, but it made me hurt for Kavanagh, which was weird and really cool at the same time.

Date: 2007-04-12 08:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
It was really weird for me that I started to feel bad for Kavanagh a few stories into the series! But I do think it's impossible not to imagine what if and to be a little disappointed when it doesn't materialize, even if that's ultimately for the best. And I do have a lot of sympathy for that.

I'm so glad you enjoyed the stories!

Date: 2007-04-12 06:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mmmchelle.livejournal.com
The second story was utterly lovely. I loved everyone else's reactions to Miko's silence, and her quiet understanding.

Miko knows that her silence is often misinterpreted. To her father, it meant modesty, and many people believe she is shy, and there was an American doctoral student she dated in grad school who once told her, "You're too in love with thinking to care about talking, aren't you?"

None of this is particularly the case. Miko just experienced a disappointment with words early in life, the way they never quite match up to what you see or feel or imagine, how hard it is to say even a fraction of what you mean, and she's not put much faith in talking since.


Those two paragraphs are just perfect.

The birth was fun, too. Carson with the baby dropping was priceless, and John and Rodney's reactions throughout were spot on.

Date: 2007-04-12 08:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Considering how brief Miko's screen time was, she really has fascinated me ever since. I like to think of her as having so much going on beneath her outward quiet and calm. Also, I took the characterization I gave her a little bit from a friend of mine in college, who was not just beautiful but very quiet, in a way that wasn't uncomfortable or apologetic at all. She was very popular with guys and she once said to me it was because they could write whatever they wanted to onto her silences.

I'm so glad you liked these stories, doll!

Date: 2007-04-12 06:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ashinae.livejournal.com
These were so lovely! This whole 'verse has just made me such a happy bunny. I actually squeaked in a dorky fangirl sort of way when I saw these posted.

. . . at least he's got the whole not dropping the baby thing under control now. = ♥, by the way. *G*

Date: 2007-04-12 08:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Squeaking makes me SO happy! :)

I'm so glad you enjoyed these stories, doll. And thanks so much for all the lovely feedback along the way.

Date: 2007-04-12 06:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tenillypo.livejournal.com
Aw, you made me feel bad for Kavanaugh! I'd wondered what his take on all of this was...

Date: 2007-04-12 08:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I started to think more about how Kavanagh might feel as the stories progressed, and I have to believe that some part of him would be disappointed that the baby's not his, even if he is also relieved.

Date: 2007-04-12 07:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cold-poet.livejournal.com
*sigh* So wonderful. And I love the name Molly. *G* Carson fretting over dropping babies is...too cute for words, lol.

(I might be feeling a little disconcerted at feeling bad for Kavanagh, because he's a schmoe and I hate him...but the fact you made me feel for him says a hell of a lot about how lovely that second part was. *smish*)

Date: 2007-04-12 08:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm glad you like the name Molly! Oh my God. I don't know how actual parents with actual kids ever make that decision. It's hard!!

I totally know how you feel about Kavanagh. Just his greasy hair alone sets me against him, much less his personality. But...as I was writing along with these stories, I started to think about it from his perspective and to feel kind of bad for him.

So glad you enjoyed the stories!

Date: 2007-04-12 07:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mangst.livejournal.com
These were both beautifully done, but the second one really pulled at my heart strings. The little background of Miko was almost poetic, and her observations on and interactions with Kavanagh were both sweet and sad. I, like most of the inhabitants of Atlantis, was thinking that he would be relieved that he wasn't sharing a child with McKay. But it makes total sense that he would feel a loss as if his child had died. Aw, crap where are my tissues?

Date: 2007-04-12 09:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm glad you were touched by the second story! I wasn't sure how people would feel about it. Kavanagh's not a favorite. With me either, actually. But when I started to think about it from his perspective, it occurred to me that his feelings about the situation would probably be more complicated than simple relief he wasn't the father.

Thanks so much for the lovely feedback!

Date: 2007-04-12 07:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] anitac588.livejournal.com
Cute mom!Rodney and dad!John story. The part with food allergies made me laugh - he so would fret about such things.
Wonderful, wonderful story about Kavanagh's point of view, even if it is through Miko.

Date: 2007-04-13 04:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
It's a good thing that Rodney has John to balance him, Anita, because I suspect there's going to be A LOT of stuff he'll fret over. *g*

And I had to be fair to Kavanagh. He may not be my favorite character, but if the baby had been his, I'm sure he would have done his best to be a good father.

Date: 2007-04-12 07:50 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] fathomlessspite
OMG, i'm only at the Carson dropping the first baby he delivered part, but had to comment because I'd forget other wise and seriously, I am completely laughing so hard right now, just so you know :)
Now...back to the story...

Date: 2007-04-12 08:01 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] fathomlessspite
Now that I've finished...

I love this series so much, and this was lovely, especially having the two points of view. And it truly shows your skill as a writer, that you made me kinda like Kavanaugh, a tiny little bit...

Looking forward the the next story!

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Date: 2007-04-12 07:53 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] yavannauk.livejournal.com
The first one is just so adorable and sweet and I'm all happy that John is the father and then you go and whammy me with the second one. *sniff*

Date: 2007-04-13 05:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm glad you liked these, doll! I really started out just to make a joke of the whole Kavanagh thing, but then I began to think about how he'd feel, and I had to write his side of the story.

Date: 2007-04-12 07:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bethynyc.livejournal.com
*cries* So lovely! I adore the Rodney/John/Molly family! So easy to feel the love between them all already. The Miko and Kavanaugh story was heartbreaking on it's own!

Date: 2007-04-13 10:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Awwww, yay! I'm so glad you liked these, doll. Writing all these stories has given me baby pangs for, like, the first time ever! *g*

Other Points of View

Date: 2007-04-12 07:56 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] kyanoswolf
I really loved "The Loudness of Gestures." The 'other side of the story' has always been one of my favorite types of fic.

It's sad and sweet and it opens a window of possibilty in the face of a closed door.

Re: Other Points of View

Date: 2007-04-13 10:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you liked it! I set off making the "maybe it's Kavanagh's baby" plot point a joke or a way to create tension, but then I began to think more about how he'd feel, and I had to write his side of the story.

Date: 2007-04-12 07:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] justabi.livejournal.com
Just a false alarm, and she should have been relieved, and mostly she was. But there was a little part of her, the place where distant possibilities took on a life of their own and flourished so vividly, that mourned losing what she'd never actually had.

God, I know exactly what you mean. *sniff* Not that I wanted Kavanaugh to be the daddy. At all. But still.

Date: 2007-04-13 10:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
*nods* I didn't want Kavanagh to be the father either, well obviously *g*, but I do have sympathy with the notion of losing something you never really had. So I had to write his side of the story.

Date: 2007-04-12 07:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shadowserenity.livejournal.com
Oh, oh, oh. I loved the emotion in both pieces - the sense of family and wamrth in the first and loss and reclusion in the second.

*sighs happily*

Date: 2007-04-13 10:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you liked the stories! I feel almost as relieved as Rodney that the baby is finally here. :)

Date: 2007-04-12 08:04 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] steammmpunk.livejournal.com
Oh wow. Wonderful and perfect. The first one made me so happy, I loved everyone's reaction, it's just so right and fit. The second one was really, really cool, not only because you made me feel for Kavanagh, but also, terrific Miko voice. Thank you for the marvelous read, and welcome to the world, baby Molly Sheppard McKay! ♥

Date: 2007-04-13 10:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you liked these! I feel almost as relieved as Rodney that the baby is finally here. *g*

Date: 2007-04-12 08:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] norwich36.livejournal.com
The first one is lovely, but the second one completely breaks my heart--and I don't actually even know who Miko and Cavanagh *are* since I've only seen a couple episodes of SGA! That's some very powerful writing, there.

Date: 2007-04-13 10:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Awwww! That's the nicest compliment ever. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story even though you don't know Miko and Kavanagh. Kavanagh has been in a couple of episodes, but Miko is a very minor character. I just like her. :)

Date: 2007-04-12 08:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lokte.livejournal.com
I have been looking forward to the birth story and you did not disappoint. The idea of Rodney and John with a tiny baby is sooo cute and I don't normally get gooey over babies.

The contrast of Kavanagh's story was very touching and you have to feel sorry for the guy. Miko's POV set it off so well. At the start when you said 2 POV's I would never have guessed who the second would be in a million years.

Hope you feel the urge to continue with this. :)

Date: 2007-04-13 10:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scribblinlenore.livejournal.com
Yay! I'm glad it didn't disappoint! Because, I have to admit, I was feeling the pressure of writing the big day.

I'm so glad you liked the second story as well! There will definitely be at least one more story, and I'm certainly not ruling out the possibility that I might write more in the future. :)
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